“No-More-Stairs!!” I hate those things! There were over a thousand of them on Stone Mountain. I love to go hiking through the fresh mountain air. I’m just scared of heights, which really doesn’t help! I was at Stone Mountain in Virginia, USA on a trip with my school to Camp Cheerio. We were at the peak and that is when I came across a tree with a green thing on it. It was a odd caterpillar. He was a bright green little fella with some maroon stripes and some green stripes. He had a triangular head and guess what, he bit me! What I was really anxious about was the waterfall. I heard people died on it recently. When I finally got to it, it was phenomenal! It had lots of jagged rocks at the bottom. On the way back there we a lot more animals including giant millipede, camel cricket, and a bright green crab spider. When we got to the bottom, of course everybody went to go look at the dead deer. Stone Mountain was magnificent!
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That’s really cool, Ryan! I agree that the waterfall was awesome. We stopped near the top of Stone Mountain and saw potholes where lightning had struck. Did you stop there, too?
Dear Ryan,
I liked your story because you do a nice job describing the things that you saw, and you explain how you were feeling in different situations. I can picture you climbing those stairs, looking at the bug, and watching the water fall onto the jagged rocks at the bottom.
I might suggest that you break your story into several paragraphs, e.g., one about the stairs, one about the caterpillar, and one about the waterfall. Also, some little words are missing or not quite right here and there, as in “a odd caterpillar” and “there we a lot more animals.” If you proofread your story carefully you can catch these things.
I did David and I was very surprised that the lightning had struck the ground so many times.
That post was from me with my dads email! 🙂
I also hated those stairs. There were more than a thousand of them. I got so tired, but I distracted myself by talking with Senor glass and Justin. On the way own, it was kind of steep. I remember when you found that lizard, and also the caterpillar that vomited on you.
I hated the hike, honestly, but it was a great view from the top.
We did get a great view I was surprised how far it was.