4 Responses

  1. 18ashwins at |

    Once again great job! Just change the last sentence from, “Hey!” Victoria swiveled around to have the second guard push her down and pull his knife, to, “Hey!” Victoria swiveled around to have the second guard push her down and pull his knife out.

  2. 18coled at |

    Good job James! Did you write this by yourself? It’s really good!

  3. 18joshk at |

    I really enjoy reading your story. I love the plot. It reminds me of Rick Riordan’s writing a little bit.

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