Story Feedback by David

 

Lately, Davi, Ryan, and I have been writing a story called Diamond Ages. We have posted the prologue, and I am looking for feedback about the story so I can tell my co-writers what people say. Please comment, so we can improve our work. We hope to post the first chapter soon! Thanks for everyone commenting on the prologue!

 

 

 

 

 

Picture drawn by me!

Poem by Ian L

I made this poem during English class. The words I use are not crossed out in purple pencil. The transcript of this piece of newspaper (the poem part) is:

Listening,

Coherent.

Different ideas by looking

at the big picture.

Change by comparing

ideas from you.

 

 

 

 

 

My Stop-Motion Project for LA and How I Made it by Gus

Stop-motion is one of my favorite hobbies. Stop motion is where you take a picture of something, move it very, very, slightly and take another picture. After several hundred, it looks like a movie.I volunteered to do one for LA to both amuse my classmates and to get me to do something. The camera I used is very old, but it has a remote. Since it is from the early eighties, it is very hard to upload the pictures onto a computer, and I have to plug in three different wires to get it to work. One of these is a USB cord going into the other, the other is the charger because the camera is so old that it needs that to turn on. The third wire is for sending more power through the second to be able to turn it on.

Now I’m going to talk about what was in the movie. I did it on the Week Three Vocabulary. The words that I used in it were: sinewy, pinnacle, caucus, opulent, potable, carcinogen, conveyance, circumvent, plummet, and seraph. It was about 500 pictures, and took me about 25 hours (three for finding the remote, four for shooting, eleven for editing, and four getting it on the disc. Another few hours spent planning it as well) just to make a four minute movie. Almost half of it was created through editing. When I brought it to school, I had put it on a memory chip because the disk wasn’t working.

Finally, the moment came. As I brought it to the teacher at lunch, I was wondering if this was a good idea.  When I reached the class, I opened the door. She plugged it in to the computer, and it played. To my relief, she loved it. An hour  later, I played it and they also liked it (or at least I think).

Four Weeks Later….

Almost a month later, my fellow advisees seemed depressed, until one of them asked to see my movie again.

I played it, and they wanted to see it again.

I really think that everyone should try stop-motion, because not only is it fun, but it is entertaining when you finish.